Rewriting vs Old Writing

This is the start of my non-Talia novel involving Micki. The first section is the new section I’ve rewritten. The second part is the old section.

They say that protocol trumps everything in the military, that respect for the command structure and everyone in it is a soldier’s primary non-combat responsibility.

This simple little fact was what Micki Brandon kept telling herself over and over as she stared at the older man sitting behind the desk. She stood ram-rod straight, waiting for the order to relax, while the minutes continued to tick past.

What does he want this time? She thought. Is there something else he wants to lord over me? Or is there a fresh round of insults coming?

How someone with the disposition of a porcupine made command of any starship proved worthy of debate between Micki and her friends. While they glowed over the Captain and his teaching style, she had only negative stories to share. To her is seemed almost as if the man went out of his way to make her miserable.

“Micki you disappoint me,” he said finally.

Make sure to look at the prescribed six inches over his head, she thought.

“I’m sorry, sir.”

“I don’t get you,” Captain Alric Patton said as he rubbed the bridge of his thin nose. “Command has eyes on sending you through the command program and you act like it’s the plague.”

“I’m sorry, sir,” she said, “but as you know, I’m serving my required two years. I don’t, at this time, wish to make Fleet my career.”


And here’s the old:

Micki Brandon looked at the man sitting behind the desk and sighed. What did he want this time? Was there something else he wanted to either lord over her or insult her with this time?

How he ever became the captain of a starship, much less command the training ship Barton, beat the mud out of her. The Captain loved to let her know of every little mistake she made and then remind her of it a thousand times. Frankly she didn’t know if he was trying to make her a stronger cadet or cause her to cry. At this moment it looked like crying was the front runner.

A scar ran down his left cheek, which emphasized every facial gesture Captain Alric Patton made. His hair had turned gray long before Micki ever saw him and, in her opinion, age had done nothing but make the man crankier. Of course, she could be wrong, but at this point who knew?

“Micki you disappoint me,”

She looked at the wall the prescribed six inches above his head. “I’m sorry, sir,”

Patton rubbed the bridge of his thin nose. “I don’t get you. Command has eyes on sending you through the command program and you act like it’s the plague.”

“I’m sorry, sir,” she said, “but as you know, I’m serving my required two years. I don’t, at this time, wish to make Fleet my career.

Turning Short Stories Into Novels

As I’ve been doing my final read-thru and editing on the first chapter of The Wheel Of Fire (tentative title), I got to thinking about the short story I finished and whether or not I should start to stretch it out to be a novel or work the third Talia novel. While I’m going to try to sell it as a short story, there’s a lot of things that take place in 9k words and in some ways it feels rushed.

Would it make a good novel? There is the possibility of it being that, especially since the character isn’t such a “good girl” like my others have been. There’s no real redeeming qualities to her, but she’s still an interesting character. This is where I’d love to ask for opinions. Would people like to see me keep this short story as a short or work to stretch it out into a novel? I’m sure I could do so rather easily.

I’ll let you, my followers, help me decide that.

Current Writing News

The last 24 hours have been particularly satisfying. I finished the final rewrite of my first novel and will now start the final edit and then prepare for submission. Today the short story I was working on at the same time was finished. For the first time in a while I’m happy because I’ve had the time to actually create. If there’s one part of writing that sucks, it’s the editing process. Yes, it’s the most important part but it’s such a stressing and boring thing when I’d rather be creating something instead.

Anyone who reads the short story will be both surprised that the main character is so unlikeable. In fact, she has few redeeming qualities, but it’s written and constructed in such a way that it can be stretched into a novel rather easily if I so choose. In fact, if I can get it published in a magazine, I will seek to retain the rights to any novelization of it. Another thing that separates it from other works I’ve done is that I leave the ending intentionally open. There’s no conclusive closure to the story, and that’s done intentionally. It allows the reader to make decisions for themselves about whether Athol has a future and reaches her destination. Also, it allows me to be able to write more stories about her if I so choose.

Talia, though, is also calling to me, trying to tell me there’s another adventure of hers to tell, so I really want to get the first novel polished and ready to go. All in all it’s been a pleasing twenty-four hours. Hopefully it’s been good to you too.



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Research Shows It’s Better To Run Away From Nuclear Detonation Blast « CBS Sacramento

I can’t make this shit up. What an idiotic study..of course you want to run, why wouldn’t you? Makes you wonder how much tax payer money was wasted on this shit?


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Stats To Humble Any Perspective Writer


2013 Year End Stats!

Kristin Nelson

I’d like to cordially welcome you to the new year!

Out with the old and in with the new! But before we move on, I know readers love to get the tally of our end-of-year statistics. Please note that sales figures are approximations rather than exact calculations.


books sold (up from 33 last year).

foreign rights deals done (way up from 83 last year—holy cow!).

new clients (down from 16 total last year: 3 for Kristin and 4 for Sara).

35,000+ or some big number…
estimated number of queries read and responded to.

full manuscripts requested and read (down from 81 last year).

number of sample pages requested and read (down from 1029 last year).

number of projects currently on submission.

tv and major motion picture deals for Kristin.

2.8+ million
copies in print/sold for my bestselling long-running series this year.

1.5+ million
copies in print/sold for my bestselling individual title.

1.6+ million
copies sold for my bestselling hybrid author.

3+ million
ebooks sold for my bestselling indie-publishing-only author.

copies in print/sold for my bestselling debut series.

copies in print/sold for Sara’s bestselling author.

conferences attended—6 for Kristin (which includes Digital Book World, BEA and Frankfurt Book Fair), 5 for Sara, 2 for Anita.

New York Times bestsellers for Kristin (up from 20 just last year). I did 11 more in 2013 alone. Wowza!

New York Times bestsellers for NLA as an agency. (Sara had her very first with Jason Hough’s THE DARWIN ELEVATOR this summer. Woot!)

consecutive weeks on the NYT bestseller list for one of Kristin’s authors.

physical holiday cards sent.

electronic holiday cards sent.

Not telling it’s so embarrassing
number of eggnog chai consumed in the months of November and December.

of late nights reading on my living room chaise with Chutney.

great days loving my job!